Overall, you did a nice job, but there are some notes to point out here.
Context You started with "This is the ad..." which doesn't take my advice to make your beginning more engaging (a broad statement), but you did talk with the audience, which helped. But you didn't forecast (give a roadmap) what you were going to cover.
Substance You spoke of the ad's context, substance, and organization (very nice), and style, Well-done. But your conclusion, while it did state the ad was effective, didn't tell us how to think about this ad. It is obviously very controversial (which is not bad; it's a very real part of life that we shouldn't be afraid of here), but we also need you to help think about it more seriously. You said you wanted to expose such sexual appeals, but exposing it means you also want to give us a way to handle it, so what are the implications of this ad's effectiveness? I think your audience wanted more from you because without this finality, it was obviously a more awkward analysis than it should have been. Did you read my feedback on your RR6? I mentioned this there as well.
Organization Very clear organization, moving from point to point rather nicely. I like the way you used text on the image.
Style Your language choice was mostly appropriate, but the content was causing you embarrassment. If you didn't think you could handle it, probably best not to have chosen it. I think your audience wants to take this analysis seriously, but don't help us trivialize it by laughing about it. You did a very fine job, but in laughing about the content some, you started losing some credibility from audience members. Audiences are much more gracious than we expect; they want to give us the benefit of the doubt.
Delivery You gestured toward the screen, smiled in a way that endeared the audience toward you, and did your best (though were not always successful) in maintaining professionalism and composure when talking about this controversial content. You used images nicely and your text was minimal and effective.
Overall, you did a very good job, Quan, but perhaps more practice about word choice and demeanor would have helped you stay on top. Good to move forward and learn from this then let it keep you down. I'm certainly on your side in wanting to help you proceed successfully.
Assignment 3: Presentation
ReplyDeleteOverall, you did a nice job, but there are some notes to point out here.
Context
You started with "This is the ad..." which doesn't take my advice to make your beginning more engaging (a broad statement), but you did talk with the audience, which helped. But you didn't forecast (give a roadmap) what you were going to cover.
Substance
You spoke of the ad's context, substance, and organization (very nice), and style, Well-done. But your conclusion, while it did state the ad was effective, didn't tell us how to think about this ad. It is obviously very controversial (which is not bad; it's a very real part of life that we shouldn't be afraid of here), but we also need you to help think about it more seriously. You said you wanted to expose such sexual appeals, but exposing it means you also want to give us a way to handle it, so what are the implications of this ad's effectiveness? I think your audience wanted more from you because without this finality, it was obviously a more awkward analysis than it should have been. Did you read my feedback on your RR6? I mentioned this there as well.
Organization
Very clear organization, moving from point to point rather nicely. I like the way you used text on the image.
Style
Your language choice was mostly appropriate, but the content was causing you embarrassment. If you didn't think you could handle it, probably best not to have chosen it. I think your audience wants to take this analysis seriously, but don't help us trivialize it by laughing about it. You did a very fine job, but in laughing about the content some, you started losing some credibility from audience members. Audiences are much more gracious than we expect; they want to give us the benefit of the doubt.
Delivery
You gestured toward the screen, smiled in a way that endeared the audience toward you, and did your best (though were not always successful) in maintaining professionalism and composure when talking about this controversial content. You used images nicely and your text was minimal and effective.
Overall, you did a very good job, Quan, but perhaps more practice about word choice and demeanor would have helped you stay on top. Good to move forward and learn from this then let it keep you down. I'm certainly on your side in wanting to help you proceed successfully.